We just finished learning about three stages of revision: conceptual concerns, organizational concerns, and surface-level concerns. Which of these stages is your primary concern for your Unit 1 Project at this moment? Post a comment here explaining where you will focus your attention during your next round of revisions, noting which specific questions you will focus on and why you believe dealing with these questions will be the most efficient use of your time.
I am most concerned with the conceptual aspect of my paper. When I was forming the argument against the author, it was difficult because I knew that I disagreed with the author but the disagreement was not direct. I had to thoroughly explain my views, and although I know exactly what I mean and can answer questions about my argument, I am not completely sure that my argument is clear throughout the paper.
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I believe my overall organization works but as I continue to review my paper, I may find ways to make it better. I think I have exactly what I need conceptually and the majority of my time from this point on will be spent working at the sentence level. I am still open to other potential organization possibilities but for the most part I will focus now on each sentence and how effectively it contributes to my overall argument.
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I think that I am in the organizational stage; this always proves to be the hardest stage for me. I will focus on making my Unit 1 paper flow; I want to make the thesis statement, topic sentences, and intro/conclusion really clear. I know what I want to say and I have evidence to support it, I just need to make it coherent so the reader can follow my logic (and ultimately agree with me, of course).
ReplyDeleteQuestions I will focus on:
1. Is there a clear logic to the order in which my evidence unfolds?
2. Is there a sense of balance to my essay?
3. Does each of my paragraphs have clear topic sentences?
4. Do I have transitions that move the reader clearly from one point to the next?
5. Does each sentence in each paragraph relate back to its topic sentence clearly and directly?
I know this is basically every question in the section for organizational concerns, but I feel I will benefit from answering all of them to ensure that my paper is efficient and coherent.
I will begin with organization concerns. I feel like I may be passed this level, however I would like to answer the questions such as "Is this the order that will be most convincing to my reader?" After checking these concerns I will move on to the surface-level concerns. The main questions that need to be answered for my draft are "Does the draft grab my readers' attention?" and "Am I repetitive within my paragraphs?" Therefore, I believe I am in between the organizational and surfact-level phases of revision.
ReplyDeleteAt this exact moment, I am at the stage where I need to focus on writing the paper as a whole, particularly how well the paragraphs relate to the thesis and the clarity of sentences.
ReplyDeleteDealing with these issues will not only allow me to revisit every sentence written in my paper, but it will also allow me to check my arguments for how compelling they are and for how relevant they are.
I feel that I am in the stage that is relating to sentence structure and the more "fine-tuning" of the paper. I feel that I have one flow issue with the final body paragraph and the conclusion,but I feel those can be easily fixed with changes in word choice and sentence structure.I feel that I can assist in the flow of the final body paragraph by adding in more information about the issue into the prior parapgraphs mainly the introduction paragraph. I really like how the beginning of my paper works and I especially like the organization of the introduction and first few body paragraphs. I feel that if I work with the sentence structure and apply higher level skills my paper will be made into a great one. All in all, I enjoy the topic and organization of my writing and feel that I need to work more on the sentence structure and such. Therefore the questions that I will focus on is how can I improve my final paragraphs with respect to flow and how can I elevate my paper to that next level,gramatically speaking. I feel these are the most efficient uses of my time because I am content with the other aspects of my paper.
ReplyDeleteI believe that I am still in the conceptual level of my paper. I think that my ideas are strong but I haven't yet figured out to express my arguements and my opinions in a effective way. I need to work to frame the summary based on my arguement. My topic sentences are a good start, but I need to strenghten the claims that support them. At the organizational level, I need to take a closer look at my paragraphs and make sure they follow the roadmap of my thesis. Some paragraphs might contain more than one idea that needs to be changed and put in a seperate paragraph.
ReplyDeleteMaggie Nash: I believe I am between conceptual issues and organizational concerns. I still need to go back and make sure my paragraphs relate to my topic sentences. After that My next step will be to work on my road map. As of right now I do not think my paragraphs are in an orderly manner. I also believe I will need to develop more of my ideas and make sure my transition sentences are clear and make sense to the reader. As of right now my draft is a very ROUGH draft if you know what I mean. I believe it needs a lot of organizational work.
ReplyDeleteI would say that I am mostly in the organizational stage. I know what the points of my paper need to be and they are included in my thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. However, I need to address the original article more in my blog. I need to add his opinions to my counter-arguments of each point. This problem might actually be considered a conceptual concern in a way. Of course, I still have some surface-level concerns. Still need to correct and revise paper for minor errors such as spelling and grammar.
ReplyDeleteMy most concern is still at the conceptual level. My argument is not strong enough so I may still need to find more evidence to support my claim. And I find it hard to disagree with the author directly. And after working on the conceptual and organizational level, I need to revise a lot in the sentence-level because I sometimes find it hard to find the right word or sentence to express my thoughts.
ReplyDeleteEdie Chen
I am working with the conceptual stage of my paper right now. I want to make sure there is enough evidence to support my claim, because I am worried it may be too specific. I have found two substantial pieces of evidence, but I need to find more to prove my point. I know what I am trying to argue, however I'm worried that it may be too vague and a difficult concept for most readers to grasp. I want to make the logic of the claim understandable for any one who reads it.
ReplyDeleteJoe Weitz
The stage I am most concerned with in my Unit 1 Article is the Organizational Issues stage. I am beyond the Conceptual Concerns stage because I have decided on my paper's theme and logic. However, I haven't decided how my argument will be organized and articulated throughout my paper; therefore, I definitely need to focus on the Organizational Issues before I move on to Surface Level Concerns. I will to focus on determining if my paper has a sense of balance and how effectively my transitions carry the reader's beliefs from one point to the next.
ReplyDeleteMy primary concerns right now mainly deal with going back and forth between conceptual concerns and organizational concerns. Organizational concerns are coming along more as my conceptual plans become clearer. I am focusing time on clearly trying to differ the argument the author makes to my argument. At times they seem similar on a few aspects of our topics and I need to work on differentiating them more clearly.
ReplyDeleteWilliam Parker
I will be focusing on the organizational concerns of my piece for the next draft. For the most part I believe that I have addressed the conceptual concerns of the draft, but for the most part I believe I have. Most of my paragraphs are fairly lengthy so I will need to make sure that each paragraph only has one clear idea, and also has a topic sentence that lays out the paragraph and relates back to the thesis.
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